Hmm...
Well, the graphics were definitly top notch, you have great skills there. But the humor was slightly lacking, it'd be good for little kids (Hey I should really show this to my aunts friends kids, they'd enjoy it) but not really for a higher age group. I'm still impressed though, by the graphics themselves.
I wouldn't mind working with you on a movie though. I'm a comedy writer myself, and as I noticed in your reply to 35xSeries, you said you'd like to collaborate with a skilled joke writer. I'd be up for working with you =D